All Comments on 'Best Served Cold'

He got what he deserved!

5

I sure as hell didn't see that ending coming. Well done, Thank You!

Great story, but the revenge is only fully revenge if Devon KNOWS his son isn’t really his, biologically.

Nice twist. would have been satisfying to hear his wifes thoughts a ways down the line.

I will never understand the trope that has the AP deserving more burning than the slut. It doesn't make any sense. The treacherous backstabber in all these stories is the wife. NOT her lover. He didn't exchange any vows to commit for life to the cuck. In most cases, he doesn't even know the dude. And yet, compared to what the wife gets, they always get the brunt of the supposed revenge in these.

Is it some primitive bullshit that makes authors focus on the dude instead of the slut woman? Don't they realize women actually have accountability and they are 100% responsible for their fucking around. In this story, she even admits she came on to him like a bitch in heat. It really makes no sense

It's only revenge if the other person knows what you did.

So no complaints to the college the wife went to and the dude graduated from???

That would have actually been revenge.

She would have been fired and he would have been expelled and neither would have been able to get another job at a college.

Just another weak cuck story written by a closet cuck with no writing talent.

Why wasn’t arsehole Devon completely physically destroyed? Then tell the cunt he is raising another man’s child. For u a shit story.

I can tell the anonymous commenter from 2 days ago that started his comment with ( I will never understand) is obviously ok with sleeping with married women. Cuz only a disrespectful dog would think that the one sleeping with someone married is an innocent person. What a dildo.

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5 stars for the story. Loved the revenge 👍👍

Liked it, plot was along usual lines, but this story was well written, a commentator below was right when they said revenge has to be known by both parties for it to be good.

Thank you for the story. I liked it, but the ending is so weak. And sad really. What kind of a man, also already a father, would father a child and let someone else raise it for revenge? And spend next decades knowing the child will never know him. Who is he actually hurting with this?

Missed the wrap-up with the cheating wife though. More details on her subsequent misery would have made it better.

Wow, didn’t see that coming! Nice.

A pretty lackluster revenge when Devon won't know and besides why would Ava marry him after seeing that? And Tally was a caricature of a person.

Wow, Hook, I know you were going for a dramatic ending, but giving away your child and calling it an act of revenge? That's one twisted character you created! Set up your alibi and then go after the young asswipe again, but give him your child? No fucking way! Your storytelling is top-notch, but this is a darkness I didn't expect from you. I guess that is a compliment on your creativity, but damn, Dude!

4 stars. It was 5 stars till MC gave up his unborn child to be raised by a lowlife.

And the revenge is exactly what? Turning into a bastard who doesn't care about who raises his baby? Plain stupid. What about the wife? Revenge on her?m Plain stupid,

This was Darwinistic revenge. Devon got cuckolded and will be raising another man's child as his own.

Not to take anything away from Hooked's effort but best revenge story in the last year is Pawn's Gambit - by a country mile.

Does this author believe that readers can relate to or sympathize with the main character? I think he ends up being as much of a bad person as his nemesis. I prefer stories with likable characters.

It’s only revenge if Devon finds out and has his nose rubbed in it. That’s true revenge, a revenge that’s lived.

Still 3/5

Love the author, but this sucked. Needs a solid editor!!!

Anyone can proof read (well at least some can) but a really good (book-type) editor prevents junk.

The story seems clever, but discerning readers want a strong story throughout and characters that they can care about.

I hope the author takes the negative criticism to heart.

I am for a dish served cold and gave this a grade of 5.

The only objection to the story is the life created by revenge is not right on any level.

Devon shall never know?? So, why is it revenge to Devon.

It's only self satisfaction.

Devon should pay a very large price

Revenge will be complete when Devon finds out. Wait until divorce because you know he will do this again.

Excellent.

Touche !

It is not revenge unless Devon finds out.What happened to Tally?

Love it. Needs another chapter where he sends Devon a message congratulating him on the birth of HIS son. Let the asshole figure out what that means. Need to find out what happens to the cunt wife also.

I skipped the adulterous sex, since that leaves me, yes "cold". Otherwise, a good story. Could be improved by a little more Karma on the slut. What a fucking evil bitch. No guilt at all. Wouldn't surprise me if she hadn't been fucking around on him their whole marriage. Glad he had a good friend to clue him in. We owe each other this service. Wouldn't you want to know if you were being cheated on?

What happen to the slut Tally? Devon does need to know his child is not his and it is Steve's but only if it does not harm Ava or the child.

So Stephan would abandon his child, his son, and allow him to be raised by a person like Devon? I get that MC detests Devon and wants revenge. But leaving your kid to be raised by someone you so strongly hate seems so wrong to me. That's why only 4 stars for an otherwise interesting story.

Devon will find out at some point. Since he is a player he will eventually get divorced and may find out then if his wife wants revenge. Or when blood tests or genetic testing is done at some point, and this is more and more common now. Wife really went thru some kind of midlife crisis thing, and on impulse throws her marriage away. If she doesn't get into therapy now she is headed for a pathetic existence not that anyone cares

Great writing. Too bad Tally couldn't quit; she might've saved her marriage. I enjoy the thought of sharing; no cheating involved.

Well done. 5 Stars

Good not great

Great would have been the ex-wife suffering a lot, enormous lot

What happened to “wifey slut”? And why didn’t he go to the college, and blow the door open on their relationship? 5 stars.

Irrational and stupid. Yet it somehow scored high so colour me surprised...

This story was chock-full of loathsome characters, yet I was unable to look away for some reason.

Tally hit the Ladyboner Lotto and lost all sense of propriety. It happens. She claimed to still love her husband, which also can happen, I guess, but he was nowhere near the top of her list. Tally saw him as an obstruction, someone to be lied to and manipulated while she explored her new career as an organ grinder, taking narcissism to stratospheric heights.

This was a marriage made somewhere, just not in heaven.

Devon was a skunk of a completely different odor. At first I had him tagged as another morally insolvent opportunist, but he also possessed a darker element. Like a snake that could be agitated into pursuing an antagonist who cornered it. Creepy.

I had sympathy for Stephen until he pulled that stunt with Ava and her for going along. To use a child in that fashion boggled my mind. I don’t even want to consider his quality of life growing up.

Two of my favorite elements in a LW story are the tension and drama provided by discovery and confrontation of infidelity. In that regard this was a virtuoso performance.

Farewell from this steamy bayou rife with vipers, where love is hiding from ICE because it’s Visa has expired. Until next time.

Revenge isn't revenge unless the other person knows at some point. It's just a thing with no meaning except to two people. Thre one that deserves the pain never receives it. Then in the case of a child he can return it in spades. First fraud, false birth certificate or public document, in some states perjury, 2 to 5. Second, backchild support unknown amount . Failure to pay,jail or prison. It's not a civil judgment in some states it's restitution for fraud.

Poe agreed w olefisherman.

I'm not letting this asshole raise my kid.

It's not really revenge as Devon doesn't know what happened. Nor does Tally. Ava shouldn't come out of this scot free either. She wasn't worried about Devon fucking a married woman or ruining a marriage just that he said sex with Tally was the best ever. The story just left me feeling unsatisfied it wasn't a reconciliation as there was no chance of that nor was it a burn as the three other characters really didn't lose out although Tally did the most. But I'm sure she used her killer body to get a new man pretty quickly. The MC came across as a bit weak to me. BardnotBard

Thank you for sharing. I truly enjoyed the story and the twist would love a follow up on where they all are 18 years later?

Just another middle aged woman who goes through a midlife crisis. I highly doubt she will find another “ sucker” to marry her. 5 stars.

@brownlab to add to that he left the guy feeling victorious and healthy. After impregnating his fiance he should of worked with her to convince him to have a vasectomy or make sure he had an accident and couldn't have children any more then proceed to let him know he has no bio children.

Liked the story but wondering why Stephen didn't start checking on his wife after his neighbor alerted him. His wife thought through her pussy (I suppose that's their version of us men thinking with the small brain) by being so turned on by Devon, she forgets her husband. Thinking about Devon in bed while with her husband's definitely not good. Going to his place, even tho she wasn't expecting him to record it, was stupid beyond measure. Fighting for her marriage then doing that?

For Stephen, I'm wondering why he didn't sue Devon for alienation of affection or whatever, even if it didn't go anywhere; bring it to the Dean's attention 1st, on the grounds of asking if Devon's on the premises. Even tho everything happened outside of the school, it would probably still affect both parties.

The main point of retribution is letting the person know who's "attacking" them. In this case, Devon won't know, & Ava can't tell him. Steven would likely be responsible for a lot of expense for raising the kid if she told. And not saying means Devon doesn't feel any pain. In fact, between that & not having to deal with the college, he gets off scot free.

In the end, I suppose, 4 stars. Story was written well, but while Stephen took a bit too long to act, his then-wife & her lover was disgusting individuals. Devon's right: why marry her as she's a cheater & old enough to be his mother, while being more than easy to get into bed. Bob

Pretty crap, the MC could have and should have destroyed arsehole’s life slowly and painfully over a number of years involving plenty of physical retribution. Also MC should have got arsehole sacked and sued over alienation of affection. Not one of your best.

One page one when the wife's name changed from Tally to Tracy and back to Tally again I stopped reading. That causes confusion and, frankly, caused me to lose interest in reading further. The plot may hace been good but this is below your caliber. You're a better writer than to publish without proofreading.

There needed to be some motivation for Ada to do as she did rather than just break it off with Devin.

20 years later. "Dear Devon: Just a note from an old acquaintance. Thanks for raising my son, he is a handsome young man, a chip off the old block, am I right? Let's see, I beat your ass and then planted a baby in your wife, Ava, just before your wedding day. Cold revenge tastes great, doesn't it. signed, An old friend"

Two months ago I explained why this no revenge at all, but I awarded four stars. I was wrong.

Three stars.

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JPB NOT BOB

The vengeful cuck lets a manwhore raise his biological child? What did the kid do to deserve that fate?

5*

Now that's revenge. But it's to bad Steven didn't manage to rupture Devons' nuts like smashed grapes.

To the JPB Anon, it's revenge because Devon is raising his kid, Devon is a cuck and doesn't know, it also depends if it ever goes into what Tally is dealing with. It kind of just ends, like we don't know the aftermath, which is what drops it for me.

Too much destruction. We also needed to hear what happened to Tally.

He didn’t get any revenge on the wife.

This story has haunted me and makes me very sad. It sort of ended, but really cries out for an additional page or two telling more about Telly's life after, and Stephen's life going forward. I don't see them getting back together, but some sort of peace would be nice.

A last little bit of revenge would be him running into Tally somewhere and asking, "Hey Slut, how's your boyfriend? Still fucking up a storm with him?"

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For us, it would be nice to know that she *doesn't* consider the amount of sex she got before he dumped her (and insulted her about her age) to have been worth what she threw away (as well as having her whole family *know* what a slut she is).

Here's another "would have loved to see this"...

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Though Tally had managed to work her way back into her son's life over the years, she was crushed by part of a conversation she overheard between Jeff and his wife.

"Baby, you know your mom is willing to babysit the kids. It would be so much more helpful if we let her."

"That may be, but I'm not sure I want someone of my mother's questionable morals left alone with our kids. I'm just not comfortable with that."

And in less than a minute, Tilly realized she'd never get the relationship back that she used to have with her son.

Very nice. Clear enunciation of the reality the world is filled with Predators and even more so with cheating, lying, adulterous trailer trash whores.

Most women will do sexual acts with their lover that they wont do with their husband. Men if your woman doesnt do anal and swallow weekly, thats because your not worth it and your a cuck and shes doing those things with another man.

Only simp men are faithful because there are no faithful women left.

Good story...

Except, Steve Should have recorded Every time he and Ava had sex and send it to 'Dev' after being married a full year.

No piece of shit is ever going to raise my Progeny.

You write such wimp MC's. Why in the hell is the husband cuddling the slut while watching TV after he finds the slut with the lover's cock in her ass?

Is it truly revenge on Devon if he never knows his wife had Stephen’s baby? Maybe. Hopefully Tally lives alone and dies lonely. Four stars ⭐️ for this one.

If the world were fair, stephen would have video taped a few sessions with Ava, along wirh a copy of the dna results, proving that stephen was the father. Then, he could have waited a couple years and text those attachments out of the blue to Dev, as well as filing for visitation as the father of his son, assuring Dev that he'd always be around his son and Ava, and Dev could never be completely sure of his wifes fidelity any time Stephen came around.

Follow up 10-15 years later to both cheaters if it is true dish served cold is much sweeter!

Its strange, the cuck get young wowan and pregnanting her herhuhu

Good story, but not a very satisfying ending. What happened to the wife?

Wasted time after catching them together and filming!

Drunk and went back???

Didn't immediately do something But WIMP

Not much of a revenge if Devon doesn't know 'his' son, isn't. Unless there are future plans to tell him, but since the story ends with Stephen chuckling to himself, we'll never know. 'Meh' ending, 3 stars.

Agree with others, week ending, story ran out of gas just short of the finish line. Should have taped session with Ava. Follow-up at later time with Ava leaving Devon for Stephen, even suing Devon for child support. Lastly, Tally needs to end up alone and estranged from her kids.

I disagree with the anons below. It's a difficult situation once you bring in another person and then add a child it ceases to be just about a bruised and fragile ego.

While cucking Devon in the true traditional sense of the word isn't the ego smack down of a btb tantrum, it's a lifetime of warm feelings every night you go to sleep.

If Devon found out, sure you'd get a laugh and a smug sense of revenge, but you'd have a child to take care of and a woman that you'd have thrown under the bus.

As for the MC's wife, what better revenge could you have than knowing she'd been thrown away like the trash after a party. With an ugly tattoo to remind her everytime she looks in a mirror.

As a cautionary tale, if you want to stay with your partner after cheating on them do not go down the 'I couldn't control myself' route as that screams it'll happen again because I lack self control.

This story reminded me of the Native Americans. Once put on a reservation and given cattle to raise, they would release the cattle, and hunt them. It didn’t take their depression away. Although not directly related, I remember if you came up to an older, maybe chubby woman and flirted with her, one of two things would happen. If she was always large, she would probably be embarrassed and turn away. If she used to be hot until her looks started fading, she would be back flirting with you, like she was 20. The woman in this story might have still had an ok body. But she was no longer “ all that”. But the guy convinced her she was. Because at the end of the day, the woman in this story, and the Native American, all were living in the past, and bound to be disappointed.

I liked the revenge at the end. And would have liked to see how things worked out for wifey, now that neither man wanted her. Reality is a stone cold bitch. 5 stars.

Loved it. A sequel chapter could catch up with Tally to see where she goes from here.

i want to hear the story of when the revenge is revealed

This story is very well-written, as are all of Hooked's stories. Unlike his others, however, this one is nonsense. Revenge is fathering a son who will be raised by a pathetic world-class shit? Total nonsense. Convincing a very young woman to get pregnant with Stephen's child and then marry a dishonest, cheating, good-for-nothing scum? Total nonsense. The basic story premise isn't believable. Nevertheless, it was entertaining.

Hooked 1957 is a very creative talented writer. But this story was just annoying. There was no real revenge. Tally just walks away a bit sad for losing her husband but no doubt finds herself another sucker soon enough. Devon is a nasty piece of human garbage, but marries himself a beautiful woman and never knows he is raising Stephen’s child, so where is the revenge on him? No one loses their job and they just carry on as if nothing happened. The only true devastation in this story is to Stephen.

Not much to like about this one.

You are capable of much better Hooked. I do enjoy most of your works.

Very sad. No one gained and a poor child got a demented father to raise him. Would his parents even stay together because his conception was an act of hate.

Hooked got to clever and dropped a "****" on us.

Tally was an absurd caricature of an obsessed, demented LW. I know divorces happen after 25+ years of marriage but rarely fir losing their minds to orgasm addiction. Also why the incongruity? She is so enraptured with the asshole, but Ava when cuckolding him with Steve out if revenge, is emphatic that Talky traded down sexually? Huh?

I agree with the other commenters; this story needs further completion. Perhaps along the following. . . . After 5 years, Ava divorces Devon for cheating and takes him to the cleaners using the pre-nup that had an adultery clause. Devon gets to live in a crappy, small apartment, while Ava gets house and cash and plenty of child support and maintenance. One of Devon's cuckolded husbands finishes the job on Devon's nuts and Devon is rendered sterile and impotent. A couple of years later, Ava moves back to Stephen's town and co-habits with Stephen until the child reaches 18 (or until child support dries up), finally marrying Stephen. Ava and Stephen even have a second child (a girl) born out of wedlock due to wanting to keep Devon on the hook for child support. Everything gets resolved with the daughter after the wedding.

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Eventually, Devon's video file does show up on porn sites with her real name even appearing. Stephen's brother was the source of the file on the internet, not Stephen as Stephen didn't want to hurt his son. Tally's future dates all have high expectations for sex but low expectations for any "real" relationships. Her professor retires and she is given to a younger, married professor who has no use for her sexually. Her son refuses any contact after the video hits the porn sites.

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Finally, the daughter and son both get a DNA test done and discover they are FULL brother and sister and neither have any real relationship to Devon. This occurs too late to let Devon sue Ava and Stephen to recoup any of the child support or other divorce settlement money. Of course, son let's Devon know the truth to rub in the fact after Devon's cheating led to his divorce.

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Someone please, take this outline and run with it. I don't have the skills to do it myself.

To add to my last post ...

Ava and Stephen should make a video (complete with date information) of their last time together in bed before the Ava and Devon's wedding perhaps with the results of the pregnancy test. After blurring out their faces, the video should be saved until well after any statute of limitations would allow Devon to sue for back payments. Then, the video, with Ava saying "Tally traded down with Devon", should be sent to both Tally and Devon.

Good story. All the people here (Tally, Devon, Stephen, and Ava) are damaged goods, but Tally and Devon are certainly the worst.

5 stars - even with the 'Martian Slut Ray', this was a decently written story. I especially liked ex-husband's non-violent revenge. I would like to think he would keep in contact with his second son and treat him just the same as his first son. Maybe he should forward the pictures and story on to his ex-SLUT, for good measure and additional revenge.

And to fully fuck over Devon, Steve needs to wait 18 years and let Devon know that he isn't the father of the son he just spent 18 years raising. With the very same message about A Dish Best Served Cold.

Tally probably still landed on her feet, big boobs and all.

Where did tally end up...

Tally is the classic cake-eater. Spoiled, bored, lonely, self-centered. Probably spent a fortune on self-help books and too much time on Facebook, so she got the modern neurotic disease.

It’s not revenge if the whore and her boy toy don’t onow

Needed more on what happened to Tally. Marked down for that reason.

So the big revenge was to let you child be raised by an asshole?

Why does he hate his kid so much? The kid didnt even exist

No reveng if the ass never knows

It's not revenge at all. Better luck next time

Meh. The boyfriend got revenge, the husband breeded the guys girlfriend but he didn’t get to rub it in So he really didn’t get revenge

Not enough payback. Devon needed to find out he wasn't the father. Jeff needed to discover and disown his mother. She needed to lose her job.

YEAH!! This is a pretty good story overall!! Did really appreciate the revenge…. While it is mostly good when the other guy sees/feels the burn of revenge there are other times when just me knowing he was burnt is good enough!!

Great revenge, entrusting your child to the hands of a morally bankrupt individual. What kind of parents are either of them going to be.

Круто! Но семьи мало! Жена вообще осталась при своём и теперь пойдет гулять со всеми подряд. Автор даже не указал, что она начала сожалеть о своей измене. А Девону надо было сообщить лет через 10-15. Автор это тоже пропустил

Excellent - very clever!

But you never let the Devon Character know he was raising his fiances baby by him.

Nope. It is isn’t revenge unless the asshole knows it. Sorry. And what happened to the slut? Might be nice to know. Better ending would’ve been the wife dumping the asshole after letting him “discover” the baby wasn’t his. Maybe marry Steven, maybe shack up with him to raise his son. This ending sucked big time, as is usual for this writer….good setup, poor delivery.

Great. Of course it would be cool if Devon found out. His EGO could use the hit.

Not revenge if the little douchbag doesn't know

devon has to no

Needed a proper ending like what happened to the wife after she broke up with Devon?