All Comments on 'Controlled Surrender'

One of the best stories I've read on Lit in a long time. I'm not even a fan of piss or needle play but you still made it a beautiful read and a satisfying visual for my imagination. Thank you so much and I look forward to new stories from you :)

Catharsis was beautiful. This wasn't. Power exchange requires trust. His games and lying and unpredictability make him untrustworthy. His little show at the rest stop could have gotten them arrested. I understand this is Literotica, you're writing porn fantasy, etc. But after reading Catharsis, this was a major let down.

Re Anonymous: yeah, this is not my best work. I was caught up in the idea of being able to write the things that had been rattling around in my brain. I hadn't figured out out to translate my ideas as well. I wrote Catharsis much later. I'm glad you liked it, at least.

I cringed through the needle play thinking this was going somewhere. It didn't. Power exchange is based on trust not playing a game of chicken to see who blinks first.

I think I read most of the first page before I skipped to page six to skim it. Water sports is definitely NOT my thing but this was meant to be a story about BDSM so I decided I’d just skim those parts and discount it from my opinion.

By the time you got to the aftercare it really was a case of too little too late. I wasn’t the least bit surprised that you wrote her as a “pain slut” BUT that’s not a code for inventing more and more fucked up deranged shit, causing pain just for shits and giggles. What I managed to read of this story made me want to cry, I couldn’t find anything erotic about it. Utterly depressing.

More than anything else I got the impression that he was hyped up on sick torture and was pushing as hard as possible to get her to run away from him.

I freely admit I was stupid and didn’t read the tags for this chapter because it was the 3rd and final part of a story. If I had then I wouldn’t have bothered to read it at all, not because of the water sports because I knew that was going to happen and I was going to ignore it. Violence - it has no place in any relationship.

Tess (UK)

I don’t agree with any of the commenters, or your assessment of your writing. As a Dominant I read to learn. I learned a lot! This scenario is a wonderful foray into the relationship dynamics of trust and respect. It’s set in a dream environment of all the key resources: time, privacy, good tools, toys, and hard points! I dream of the day when I am presented with all those resources to apply to my queen.

Thank you for the emotional/psychological insights, too. I’d read Catharsis first and didn’t feel I learned as much as I did in this series of 3. I look forward to reading the rest of your catalog.

you have talent and have written some very good stories. This, unfortunately, is not one of them. this type of relationship needs to be base on honesty and complete trust. he is a manipulative lying piece of crap, sorry. I just cant get into the story, as it is impossible to form any empathy around such an unlikeable character.. I would up skimming. I liked the premise, but it missed the mark.