by KingManuEL33
You said in one of the final paragraphs that his wife's name is Linda. The protagonist's wife was Linda, the wife of the scrawny kid was DeeDee.
I couldn't get past the first few paragraphs. This was so badly written it was unreadable.
Clearly you have no idea what continuity means.
I would say this story was crap but that's an insult to crap stories.
LOL what a fun story! LOL 5 stars for the writer. Looks like his wife was just plain 'out of control!' My goodness this was a fun story! Thanks for the great effort! Buster2U
That was one of the worst stories ever written on this site, which is saying lot. The only thing that was worse than the story was the abhorrent grammar. You need to focus on your homework, not writing ridiculous stories.
Busted loved this piece of shit. I guess all these bottom tier wannabes have to kiss each other’s ass.