All Comments on 'Paradise Found Ch. 06'

This was ok. Not amazing, but pretty good, the premise was engaging, the pacing was good, I think my largest complaint is with the dialog. You have a tendency to have multiple lines without any text signifying who is doing what.

This causes two problems. First, this text serves as a sign post, without it your readers can get lost and lose track of who's speaking. But second,a and probably more importantly, this text is a prime opportunity to add motion and dynamism to a scene. Describing posture, facial expressions, gestures, and tone.

Without that structure and added color scenes, particularly those with extended stretches of dialog, can become very difficult to read.

I appreciate that you took the time to finish this, and give closure to this story, even as you moved on to different projects. Too many writers simply abandon projects even after they've started releasing chapters for public consumption.

I hope this isn’t the last one. I’ve always liked role reversal stuff like this, it’s too bad it’s so rare to see. The thought experiment itself is interesting, but it also touches something inside me that just really makes me feel all tingly and emotional. I’ve only seen one other like this, in a sci-fi world where women become the dominant sex in the culture, but i thought that one came off a bit patronizing. I like yours better. I also like stuff where it’s not necessarily sci-fi, but the man is weaker, or manipulated to be emasculated. I’ve seen a couple more of that kind. The manipulation stuff really makes me feel. It’s kinda cathartic, almost certainly a fetish, but I don’t really know what about it gets to me. Thanks for writing this, I’ve really enjoyed it, and want to see more. If you end up running out on this story line I hope you consider doing more in this vein, or including elements of this type of thing. I’ve been trying to fix my craving myself, by writing, but I’m not good enough yet for my own enjoyment, so I like reading other’s works with it, and I’ve really enjoyed your take.

You have written a great science fiction story that lives up to the standards of Issac Asimov, with an erotic twist. I think he would be proud to recommend your story as an up and coming science fiction writer.

Your story does what good science fiction is supposed to do - take humans and put them in a new situation and see what happens. You have used a virus a your story vehicle, where others use a starship, another planet, aliens, but it all is in how we humans adapt to the new situation. You have done an excellent job of that, and if this is the end of the story, it has ended on a very good note.

Thank you again.

I really liked this story, El and Alex were interesting, 3D characters. I agree with you that the scope was too great, but you don’t necessarily need to elaborate on so many details. You can show a lot of the world and its changes through the characters and their unique interactions with it, you don’t have to wax on about it for paragraphs. Ending felt rushed and clipped, but I still thoroughly enjoyed it. I hope you come around to making a sequel sometime, and how their relationship and their world changes.

A terrible series. First 3 were mostly great which got me engaged, but the rest if it TOTALLY sucked.

These kind of stories of why I keep coming back to Literotica. Over all the story highly compelling, and thought provoking. At first you're there for the erotica, then you stay because the characters are fleshed out and the plot becomes increasingly interesting. To be fair all of your stories thus far have, have been excellent! Honestly I looked forward to seeing what would happen in the next each time I finished a chapter. While the ending does feel a little rushed, it does end in a very satisfying way that leaves you wanting more.

It's been years since I read a story that was so well-written, that the plot captivated me so much to the point where reading in detail about Alex's harassment, abduction and enslavement made me feel a dark, heavy pit in my stomach. I feel physically sick, dark, almost depressed after reading this. You have done a stellar job as a writer, and I congratulate you for that, but reading this saga was not beneficial to my mental hralth at all.

This was a different story full of real irony.

I appreciated the story and the moral lesson it held.

This is definitely one of the better scify stories here at Lit.

5/5

This is a well written and compelling story that kept getting better the further I read. I'm not a fan of giantess stories. I quickly found the intrigue in this story went well beyond any trope leaving me anxious to learn how the characters evolved and the closure revealed. There is definitely the erotic, but how pleasant it is to find so much more as I burned through the chapters. The writing is very well done and my appreciation goes out to the author. Thank you!