All Comments on 'Triple B or Bad Bitch Betrayal'

I thought this was a good story but I think John jumped awfully quick to his conclusions about his wife. You made him seem awfully insecure. Still very good writing.

I hope you decide to continue this story. A couple small problems I saw but nothing that can't be overcome with another chapter that goes into more depth. His wife's comment early in the story about how her sister was much better than him was baffling considering you are alluding to her not only not wanting to leave him but is still madly in love with him.

This could all be cleared up in a second chapter depending how you went with it. Definitely consider that.

Reads more like the first draft after the outline. Ending was chopped like it hadn't been thought through, unless it is the first part of a series, in which case it should have had a chapter number.

"I told him not to hit John too hard."? a little to disjointed

This is more a collection of story notes than a story.

Thought that you could have had a better ending.

I enjoyed this story but I felt that it really needed to be longer to show more of the coupling of the three it feels like there is no payoff to the story

to the cabin? Why did their journey take 45 minutes when his took all day?

Why did this guy agree to attack strip and aid in the kidnapping and sexual assault of another man and what was he compensated with?

If you always intend to end your story with an incestuous thruple why label it a betrayal?

If SHE wanted to be better for HIM why was she always ridiculing his performance?

Not to your usual high standards.

At the beginning of the story, you stated that the wife had explicitly said that he was boring in bed, and that he failed at romance. We also even heard her talk about how Terri was "a hell of a lot better than John had ever been".

What does THAT have to do with the end of her... sex training? What is their to misunderstand in that? How on earth is that a phrase about her wanting her training to be over (for... what? It isn't like she stopped having sex with him while it was going on)? It isn't even a phrase that emphases "you're so good!", but a statement that emphases that John was bad.

What about their plan, that was supposedly supposed to work to let them share again--presumably him? How does having sex with each other allow that? Why does she need to finish some sex training before she can bringing up a threesome lifestyle up with her husband?

It took a long time to get Kim where she is--what do you mean by that? Terri had a bad experience in the past, but Kim didn't. Is that referring to their skill at sex? That they've been cheating on him for years? Or was their some emotional trauma on Kim's part that John apparently knew nothing about?

Terri said that the past two years had helped Kim just as much as they had helped her. But Terri was recovering from what happened with her husband, so what was Kim growing in? Is she just talking about the sex?

Also--his assumption that they were intending to torture him to death and kill him is pretty out of nowhere and frankly ridiculous. That said, it is a little understandable with how they ATTACKED HIM out of nowhere. They said that someone else was the one to do it--who knocked him out? It wasn't a cop, that's police brutality. Don't they know that's dangerous and can result in permanent brain damage?

Why the hell didn't they try to... I don't know, TALK to him? Or at most try to lock the doors? Assaulting him with a head injury and tying him down is as far from the obvious course of action as it is possible to be.

If he thought they would be eager to be rid of him, why did he try so hard to hide from them when him disappearing from their lives is what he thought that they wanted, including worrying about a police tracker? And why did the police try to track him when his message made it clear that he left intentionally (and on bad terms)?

Why was he pretty much completely passive and accepting at the end? He just sits silently except for his "just get it over with speech". He doesn't say that he didn't talk with her because he heard her insulting him while cheating on him. He doesn't say that of COURSE he thought they wanted a divorce, since his wife was cheating on him and apparently had some sort of plan about sharing with her sister. He doesn't confront them about their actions or why he doesn't trust them or why he thinks they don't want him or why he thought he should leave. Despite having such terrible opinions of them, he doesn't show even a hint of doubt when they basically say "nope, we actually both really love you". No arguing, no trying to get anything clarified, nothing. That last scene should have been spread out over an entire page of its own accord, or even formed several different scenes as they readjusted to a more truthful and open lifestyle.

Why is Terri shocked that he thought so lowly of them (when they had been cuckolding him behind his back for years)? Especially when they themselves had brought up how upset they were afraid he'd be (completely reasonably)? And after they ATTACKED HIM?

I saw a lot of potential in this story, but I feel like it largely went wasted.

make sense.

several feet of snow on the ground, how the hell did his traitorous wife and sister in-law get there? Also, does the cabin have more than one way in/out? Maybe he's so unobservant that HE wouldn't have seen their tracks going into the place, but I sure as hell would have noticed. It was going great, until it fell apart at the end. If I could give 1.5 stars, that's what it would get, but 2 will have to do.

The wife cheated on her husband, period. No noble cause can wash away that fact. If she had sat him down, explained her fears and included him in the decision I wouldn’t have a problem and I don’t think the husband would have either. Of course, you wouldn’t have a story, either. Not a good story in my opinion, just a story.

Ugh! What? She plotted and planned to cheat, did so successfully, end of story. If she'd TALKED to him about her plan and drawn him into it from the beginning that would have been something.

plot = brainfart?!

Sorry this story got so absurd I couldn't let it pass without downvoting it for wasting my time.

the beginning was good but soon it turned into complete nonsense, really sad

She raved about how much better in bed than John her sister was, on video. But supposedly it was about her learning to please John? And what happened to the "him" that hit John? This story was clearly plotted by a brain-damaged capuchin monkey. If the beginning hadn't been so mind-numbingly stupid and contradictory to the ending, and the plot holes had been smaller, etc, it might've been good. As it is, I now need a bone marrow transplant because it gave me cancer. Brain cancer, that requires a bone marrow transplant, because the cancer makes as much sense as this story.

Still a terrible story the second time through. She cheated so she would be a "better lover", how does having a lesbian relationship with her sister make her a better lover for her husband? Who was the man who knocked him out at the end? Seems like a bunch of BS. In the end cheating is cheating NO MATTER THE GENDER OF THE PARTNER/FUCK BUDDY.

this story is illogical

beginning of the story contradicts the explanation at the end big time

at the moment it looks like the author was not able to create an working plot or the story is to short

(let´s be honest enough sex between dialog and ... lets say 3 pages of this and most readers would not care anymore - many way overrated authors on this site are doing this (on purpose or not I can not tell)

to hide that fact.

Seems this story is about miss-communication between the wife and the husband (not sure how telling him how poor a lover he is). Then a miss-communication between the author and the reader. So in the end, the charactors and the readers are totally confused as to what is going on. Writing was great, just the story was too confussing.

What a steaming pile of excrement.

Soooooo.....no. 1. His wife does not love him at all or she has some crazy screws loose rattling around in her head. 2. Pretty sure this particular story is in the wrong section of Literotica. Or at least is only half correct about the section.

Let's see what happens next?

Just a bit of advice for John when he eventually gets free…run the fuck away.